56 Weeks with Nancy Drew - The Whispering Statue - Part 2/2

Book 14

Welcome to the 56 Weeks with Nancy Drew series! If you are new here, welcome. You can find my introductory post to this series here. Please note I will be including plot spoilers in this review series. I explain my reasoning at the start of this post.

This discussion of The Whispering Statue is in two parts. You can find a link to Part One, here, where we discuss the plot of both the original text (OT) and revised text (RT). 

Now, let's pick up where we left off...

Bonkersness 

There is one bonkers scene in the RT… Okay. There are a few scenes that are fairly bonkers, but one that goes well beyond my suspension of disbelief… Nancy, Bess, and George are snooping in the storeroom of a shop when they hear someone coming.

    Instantly the young detective made a decision.

    Grabbing Bess and George by their arms, she pointed toward the empty portrait frames.

    "Pose!" Nancy whispered.

    The three girls stepped through the frames against the canvas. Each one kneeled and took a different pose. They assumed profile positions so they could not be identified easily if the intruder should happen to know them.

[…]

    The man began looking around and mumbling to himself. 

[…]

    In his search the newcomer suddenly lurched into Bess's frame. It fell over, striking Bess who also went down. Instantly the intruder realized that the person in the frame was alive!

    "Oh!" cried Bess.

    The man gave a deep grunt, then yanked Bess up from the floor. At the same instant Nancy and George leaped from their frames! (RT 110-112)

The girls quickly overpower him because he was "taken completely by surprise" (RT 113). Good thing all baddies in Nancy Drew books are incredibly dim-witted and unobservant. The crazy thing is, the girls almost get away with their disguise! 

As you may notice from the photo to follow, the illustration that goes along with the scene doesn’t do the writing any favours. From where the man in standing in the doorway he would see right down the back of the frames. The girls shouldn’t stand a chance in their silly efforts of disguise! As I said all baddies in these books are very dim, but what does it say about Nancy and her friends that they think pretending to be two dimensional objects would actually work? There are times in the RT Nancy Drews when Nancy seems to be closer to eight than eighteen. Although, I feel I’m doing a disservice to the intelligence of eight-year-olds in saying that! 

More dramatic and more believable?

The OT of this one is so over the top. But, somehow, it works! While it’s much more dramatic than the RT and some crazy things happen in this book, it stops just shy of being completely unbelievable. I think that’s why I’m enjoying the OT Nancy Drew books so much. Nancy has more of a devil-may-care attitude than in the RT, which makes for exciting reading. When this Nancy gets into a pickle I feel a lot less frustrated with her than I do when I’m reading an RT. In her efforts to help others and solve the mystery, the OT Nancy often rushes headlong into trouble and her nutty ideas of getting out of it seem just desperate enough to be believable, like this scene where she has just escaped a house where she has been kept captive and with the help of a sheet attempts to pass herself off as a statue.

    She wondered how much longer the storm would hold off. The tall trees near the place were waving wildly in the wind, and at any moment a limb might snap off and come crashing down. The site was a most dangerous one.

    Nancy stood hesitating an instant; then, with the wind tearing at her garments, she crossed the garden toward the Whispering Girl statue.

    Where three figures previously had stood, but two now remained.

[…]

    Nancy scarcely had time to hide. Wrapping the sheet tightly about her, she stepped up to the empty pedestal to become a living statue in the Whispering Girl group.

[…]

    With head bent low, Joe Mitza stumbled through the garden. He was muttering to himself, saying over and over that he had learned his lesson, and that never again would he be dishonest.

    Nancy had intended to frighten the fellow with another whispered warning. However, observing his nervous condition, she overcame the temptation and remained silent. The fellow cast a frightened glance at the Whispering Girl statue as he hastened by and went on down the road. (OT 196-199)

The scene in the RT where the three girls hide in frames is reminiscent of this one. There are a few reasons why I think this scene works where the other one fails: Nancy is pretending to be a statue and not a painting, she is outdoor at night as opposed to indoors in full daylight, and the baddie she is trying to fool is truly upset and distracted from some life-changing news he has just heard, while the baddie in the RT is just busy casing the joint. The other reason this scene from the OT works while the scene from the RT fails is because of the writing. 

Some of the writing in the RT Nancy Drews is shockingly bad. The plots have all the subtlety of a bull in a china shop and the dialogue is just plain moronic most of the time. But for me, the aspect that really suffers in this RT is the descriptions of settings. In the OT description is used to create atmospheric scenes where anything could happen. While in the RT they virtually skipped descriptions and setups to scenes and substitute them with liberally placed exclamation points. Take, for instance, the scene from the OT when Nancy visits Old Estate for the first time and sees “The Whispering Girl”.

    An ancient gate still barred the entrance to the winding private road which led to the house. As the young man pulled it open so that they might drive through, a loose board fell to the ground, making it impossible to close the barrier again. The road was dry but rutty, and a wild jungle of shrubs brushed against the car as it passed.

[…]

    The automobile rounded a bend and halted before a weather-beaten, rambling old house which was perched high above the sea. It stood at a rakish angle since one wing had no form of support at all. The water had cut a great tunnel beneath it.

    "Another season, and the house surely will topple into the sea," Jack declared, gazing about him with interest. "A lot of damage has been done since last I visited here."

    Toward the right lay what remained of a garden. There were a few scraggly rose bushes entangled among a jungle of weeds. Yet when the visitors came within view of the Whispering Girl statue, they halted and stared in awe, for the figure tended to dignify its unkempt surroundings.

    The marble piece was still imposing, though weatherbeaten and old. The group consisted of three sculptured figures; a life-sized likeness of a beautiful girl with flowing hair, on either side of which, at a little distance, stood a smaller statue. The central figure bore a startling resemblance to Nancy. (OT 68-69)

Even in daylight there is a feeling of foreboding as they approach the estate. This is a place in transition with a house that is teetering on the cliff edge, on the brink of being taken by the sea. Time is running out. If the daughter of the deceased owner isn’t found and brought to claim the property for her own soon, the house, and even the statue will be lost.

There isn’t a scene or setting in the RT to directly compare this to. I found aspects of this scene in three separate settings in the RT: the rutted drive of a derelict mansion the girls are brought to in a foiled kidnapping attempt, the statue at night outside of the yacht club where the girls are staying, and the overgrown garden at a property being used as an artist’s studio.

    The highway ran directly to the oceanfront. Here the driver turned left and drove for some distance. The area was uninhabited and the roads were heavy with sand. After a while the car went up a weed-choked driveway toward a large weather-beaten house. On the ocean side of it, sand dunes ran down to the water’s edge. (RT 24)

    The marble figure cast a broad shadow. There was something eerie about the scene with the beautiful young woman looking longingly in the direction of her Italian homeland. (RT 81)

    The front yard was filled with terra-cotta statues which stood amid high grass. Here and there a rosebud reared its head above an overgrown flower bed, and a few hollyhocks towered above the weeds. (RT 121)

In all of these scenes the bit of tension that is created is destroyed by a quick reassurance of safety. In the first scene the girls hop out of the car and outrun the men who are “past middle-age, heavy, and not so agile” (RT 26) then they double back and steal their car to drive to a phone to call the police (27). In the second, Nancy and Ned, who have been at a dance being held at the yacht club, go outside to see the statue. They think they hear the statue whispering, but shortly discover the voices are coming from a couple sitting behind the statue, the man proposing (81, 82). In the last instance, the girls talk to the artist, look at the statues on display, see someone coming and they scoot next door to have dinner at a “farmhouse [that] had been converted into a charming, old-fashioned dining room” (126).

To a certain extent the tension is softened in the OT, but not enough to clear the atmosphere. In the scene above when Nancy and her friends first see the statue, Bess comments that Mrs. Owen was right, Nancy could be its twin. Nancy’s response, “It makes me feel sort of creepy to see myself reflected in marble” (69). Moments later, Nancy asks everyone to listen.

    Everyone remained quiet for a moment. Save for the whistle of the wind in the pine boughs and the roar of the ocean, there was no other sound.

    “One can almost imagine that the statue is whispering now,” Nancy murmured.

    “It’s only the wind,” George Fayne said impatiently. 

    “Of course,” Nancy returned quickly, “and I hope you won’t think me superstitious, but I find the illusion almost perfect.” (OT 70)

George brings Nancy back down to earth, and while Nancy makes light of her flight of fancy, this only enhances the earlier tension. If logical-minded Nancy Drew is getting affected by the scene we know there is something about the derelict estate that is unsettling.

In conclusion

My plan was not to pick apart the RT, because I thought it was quite good, not great. But it didn’t put me to sleep or cause me to roll my eyes on every other page like the RT of The Mystery of the Hollow Oak did either. Even so, the RT of The Whispering Statue doesn’t compare to the quality of writing in the OT. My intention isn’t to pit the writers of these two editions against each other. Harriet Stratemeyer Adams writes simple sentences. Perhaps, it was thought that was all the children of the day were able to understand. Mildred A. Wirt manages to write a more sophisticated book without elevating the vocabulary to any great extent, rather, she varies it more, and her sentence structure is more complex.

As with many children’s books, both of these books have moments were one has to suspend their disbelief. However, these moments were a little harder to swallow in the RT. I found the incidents that were most unbelievable also made Nancy and her friends appear unintelligent. Nancy cannot be both a skilled detective and believe that hiding behind a frame will make her look like a painting. The two are mutually exclusive. 

The one problem I had with the OT was that I felt it was a bit slow to start. A lot was made of the dog, Togo, getting into trouble and taking Nancy along with him for the ride. He did enable Nancy to meet a character who becomes more important later, but Togo is all but forgotten once the group reaches Sea Cliff. Nancy leaves him at the hotel kennel and a few days go by before there is any mention of him at all. After that Togo isn’t mentioned again until the very end of the book, where he still doesn’t have any connection to the main plot. I am fairly sure Togo doesn’t feature in any of the other books in this series, but I will be on the lookout! (Through a bit of research online, I have discovered that Togo does appear in a number of the books in the Nancy Drew Diaries series. Although, I cannot directly attest to this, as I have not read any of the books in that series.)

Next up is book 15 in the series, The Haunted Bridge. See you in July!